My first Independent Writing Skills

Independent writing

For this task, you will write an essay in response to a question that asks you to state, explain, and support your opinion on an issue. Typically, an effective essay will contain a minimum of 300 words. The quality of your writing includes the development of your ideas, the organization of your essay, and the quality and accuracy of the language you use to express your ideas. You have 30 minutes to plan and complete your essay.

Some parents forbid young children from owning smartphones (cell phones with Internet access), while others disagree and believe that they are important tools for keeping in touch. Which point of view do you think is better, and why? This question is required. *

 I think is better that parents forbid young children from owning a smartphone. After all, there some many sources over the internet that convey negative content that harms as intellectual as physical to these children, I believe that whether used the wrong way might cause health diseases committing the development and growth of these kids. 

First and foremost, most children use smartphones for trivial things and forget the main reason for the important utilities that this device has to offer. For instance, there are several games and apps available on the virtual market that brings aspect violence or something negative to the child such as gunfire themes, fake news about several information from simple to complex, and so forth.  Moreover, there are social networks as well that occupy a couple of periods from the day just for posting an image or comments about topics that don't even make sense, instead of searching for educational applications/games to improve your yield in their lives.

I also believe it to be prejudicial health. I mean, to pass a lot of hours in front of the small light display may cause many health diseases, such as vision problems, head issues, sedentarism, and so on. What's more, the kid is restricting himself from playing and practicing some physical exercise like sports which increases so more the harmful idea. In other words, some children are losing their health using their smartphones for a long period and forget the simples things: Fun, to being a child.

To put it briefly, in general, the prohibition of the use of smartphones (with or without the internet) would be beneficial for many children because it enhances their productivity and improves their life quality which are so important things for whatever person, mainly children. So controlling your consumption could decrease some problems. 

Yeah... This is the first writing skill that I've completed!!!!

Bye Bye  MS SR